My ordinary life
grows less and less
ordinary as I contemplate
the birds, the clouds, the stars.
My life merges
with everything else
and I realise
I am not ordinary,
I am special. As special
as the clouds, each one
different, as special
as the birds, chattering
in a tongue I cannot decipher,
as special as the stars
that look down on us
from a great distance
in time and space.
We are all special, we are,
none of us, ordinary.
Embrace all that is special
in yourself and in everything
around you. I am special,
you are special,
everything is special.Don't be afraid to be critical about the poem or the subject, critical comment is what I seek. Giving useful critiques is a great skill to learn. Learning to critique the work of others helps you to critique your own work too.
5 comments:
An ordinary poem on an ordinary life that quickly
tries to become less ordinary. How can such an ordinary person become special. I hope that Jeffery Guess logs on and critiques this. Cheers, Denis Davey
Only a highly positive and motivated soul will feel and make others feel special. You are one such individual.Peace and blessings to you for writing this.
Thank you so much Sharif. I know we can all be special, in our own way.
Hhhm, I assume by feedback you would also like critique? I love your poem and the idea, but there are just a couple of things I would change to maybe help it flow better.
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My ordinary life
grows less ordinary
as I contemplate
the birds,
the clouds,
the stars.
My life merges
with everything else
as I realise
I am not ordinary,
I am special.
As special as the clouds,
each one different,
as special as the birds,
chattering in a strange tongue
as special as the stars
that look down on us
We are all special,
we are,
none of us, ordinary.
Embrace -
all that is special
in yourself and -
in everything around you.
I am special,
you are special,
Everything is special.
Anonymous, thank you som much for your critique. I agree that your version reads much better than mine. The only think I don't agree with is the hyphen after 'Embrace -/all that is special' etc.
You have improved my poem, thank you. Who are you?
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